Tay Price [finished]

[jen layla miller]

Character Name: Tay Price
Nickname(s): Tay
Gender: Female
Age: Seventeen
Grade: Senior
Former School: Hillard
Sexuality: Straight
Clique: Prep
Weight: 50kgs
Height: 5'4
Appearence:

Tay parades the typical ‘California girl’ look. From her blond hair, tanned skin and radiant perfection she leaves little to be desired. Her hair sits mid waist, and falls in natural curls and waves down her back. Her blue eyes and perfect skin are just accessories to her glowing smile, finished with unnaturally white teeth.

She has a slender, toned and athletic build which is maintained by going to the gym several times a week. Tay is an average height for her age but generally wears some form of heel. She has naturally olive skin, but during summer gets the perfect tan as sunbaking is on the top of her to do list. Even when wearing a tee and jeans she makes sure her clothes have a designer label on the material, or she won’t even give it a second glance.

Her hair is always split end free, her nails are always perfect and manicured, and her makeup is always flawless. She is on the borderline of perfection and she certainly knows it. As her family is quite wealthy, she always has a classy flair to her while still keepingher look origional and unique to her personality. She knows what life is like with the rich and there for undestands that looks get you a long way in life.

Personality:

There are many aspects to Tay’s personality. She is a bitch and at times quite stuck up, she gets it from her mother and father as they are very wealthy and have always taught their children the rules of the upper class. She can be very judgmental and superficial at times without realizing she is doing it. She can also be very manipulative and sneaky when she needs to be. Of corse she does not show all of these aspects openly, Tay is very deceitful when it comes to being a bitch.

However, if you are a friend, or even on her good side she’s quite a sweet and sincere girl. She loves to have fun and party, and when needed can sit down for a meaningful conversation and keep a secret. She loves going out and has quite a rebellious past, which still carries on. She has a bad temper which she can contain well but in her eyes revenge is sweet. When pushed to the limit the anger inside of her comes out, and not many people would want to be on the receiving end.

Tay was born in the upper class, and she fits it perfectly. She’s very spoilt and doesn’t appreciate a lot of the things she has. She loves guys and has a very flirty nature. She’s very used to getting what she wants when it comes to the opposite sex and her looks work in her favor, but when it comes to her parents she puts on the innocent act very well. Although she is part of the upper class, she has a secret side that not many get to see. At times, when things get tough Tay turns to drugs, alcohol, and the more 'surfer' inhabitants of Cali to lean on, shes a party girl and that will never change.

History:

Tay was born in the upper east side of New York City, where her mother and father owned a penthouse apartment. She has one younger sister, Ella, who is currently 14. At the age of 6 her father was offered a job at Central in California and as the pay was better than the millions he was earning at that point in time, he took it and the family moved to an estate in the town. From the age of six she and her sister were treated like princesses. They got everything they wanted, had their mother and father wrapped around there little fingers and even at a young age used Tay used her looks to her advantage at school.

At the age of eight, her mother was diagnosed with a brain tumor and she passed away a few days after Tay’s 9th birthday. I made the two girls and their father even closer than they already were, but soon after her dad found himself a new girlfriend to cater for his needs,and she soon after became Tay’s new stepmother. On her first day of high school, she was greeted with the chance of popularity and power and took it in a second. She was the most popular girl in high school and had everyone in her control. At 14 her father and stepmother split as he had had an affair and yet again a few weeks later She was introduced to her ‘new mother’.

At fifteen, Tay began to feel the pressure of being the top girl. She began to party every weekend, filling herself with alcohol, drugs and any kind of substance she could find. It got so bad that her father had no choice but to send her to rehab, and when that failed she was shipped off to boarding school for a year leaving Hillard behind. At at the age of sixteen she claimed to be clean with a new good girl persona, but of course it was only half true. She has now been back in Central for a year, and recently celebrated her seventeenth birthday.

Sample Rp:

‘No!’ she spat the the shop assistant as she dragged over yet another horrible shirt. ‘You know what, just don’t worry about it, ill take my money somewhere thats worth it’ Tay continued as she shoved the clothes on the counter and walked out, giving the girl more attitude then she gave her insolent step mother. As she left the stop she fluttered her hair back with her hand and continued into the boutique right next door. She walked along the black tiled floor, her Christian Lacroix shoes clicking with every step she took towards the front counter. A short brunette girl stood behind it, looking up at her with an intimidated stance. Tay looked her up and down twice, the girls nails were a tacky red and her hair was the wrong shade of brown for her complexion, not to mention the large orange makeup line that had taken up residence under her chin. She let out a soft sigh, she would have to do. ‘Im looking for a party dress, not to slutty but I want to show some skin, and DON'T waste my time’ She snapped as she turnd on her heel and stode over to the couch sitting in the corner. Crossing her left leg over her right, she leant her head in her hand and rolled her eyes, people were so useless.

She wasn’t usually this mean, if her stepmother hadnt of been such an evil controller this morning she may have toned it down a little bit. It began when she woke up, Tay had summoned Maria the housekeeper to fetch her some blueberry waffles, but her stepmother had insisted that it was bagels. I mean honestly, bagels? what was she thinking, Tay was already trying to loose weight and a big hit of wheat was not what she needed at 9am. Then, when Tay had gone to take the car keys for the BMW from the hook she had insisted that Tay take the Audi, what did she think she was, god or something?

‘What about these ones’ The shop assistant asked, stepping into Tays vision. Tay tilted her haid looking at each dress as the girl held it up to show her. ‘You know what’ She replied, a soft pout on her lips, ‘I don’t feel like shopping anymore’ and with that she stood up, patted the girl on the head and walked out.

Celeb:

Jen Hawkins

Out Of Character:

Sienna,
16,
ive been rping for about 5 years

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[( shannon )]

So this was generally okay, but improvements are needed before acceptance.
1) I would highly suggest looking back and rereading while keeping a close eye on comma usage. I noticed a lot of unneeded commas as well as sentences that needed to be split into two.
2) That being said, everything needs to be longer. Your rp sample did not reach our minimum word count of 400 per post.

Everything else was really good so if the length of each section was expanded as well as a check on sentences, I don't see a problem in accepting you.

[( shannon )]

Much improved! My only one comment is that a lot of the posters here post usually about a minimum of 500-600 words per post (though it is required to have 400). Your rp sample just made it, but I don't see a problem with you reaching 500-600 words per post. Accepted!