Hydie Mia Bloom {done}

[hydie]

Character Name: Hydie Mia Bloom
Nickname(s): none
Gender: Female
Age: 16
Grade: Sophomore
Sexuality: Bisexual
Clique: Royal Court
Weight: 111
Height: 5'9
Appearence:

Hydie is the perfect girl. That's why she made her way into the royal court. She has light blonde hair that makes it's way past her shoulders. She usually wears it down and casual. Her eyes are a greenish blue but she knows how to high light the. With the perfect make up. Hydie's lips are bear shaped and usually sports a sparkly pink gloss.

Hydie has an average body. She is a little to skinny with only a slight curve to it. She has lean muscles in her legs and arms from her cheering and dancing. Hydie has always had white skin even after moving to Cali. Though now it seems now her skin is a shade darker than white.

Hydie likes to keep a fun factor to how she dresses adding sparkle or a bow here or there. Of course nothing over the top.Hydie would hate to be kicked out of the group. Though she never shows her stomach or wrists. She is always wearing bracelets and at the beach she wears one pieces. She has to cover the scars. Otherwise Hydie is perfectly put together. She makes sure to match and wear what's in style.

Personality:

When Hydie is happy the whole world is happy. She has a bright smile that lights up the room. Hydie always likes to seem happy. When you are happy no one asks questions. Hydie is good at faking her smile. Her being truly happy is a rarity.

Hydie very rarely gets angry. Only a few things make her blood hot. One thing she can't stand is being asked about her scars or bruises. They are no one elses business. Though her anger is futile and passes quickly. She is very good at moving conversations in a different direction.

Hydie isn't very good at dealing with emotions. Sadness, grief, heart ache, you name it. Hydie can't deal with it on her own. She turns to a razor for help. That's why she has scars and gets up in arms when asked about them. She is ashamed but is more than addicted to the pain of it. She thinks if she seems happy one day she truly will be.

Lastly Hydie is a goodie two shoes. Well besides the whole cutting thing. She refuses to drink or smoke or have sex before marriage. That doesn't mean some one can't talk her into it. Hydie is a very naive girl. Being raised in a small town she was never exposed to what she is here at Central. Peer pressure can sometimes get the better of her.

History:

Hydie was born on April seventh. Her hometown a place she wants to forget in Missouri. The town barely had enough people to call a town the population sign read 376 ands that's if you included all the dogs and cats in town.

Hydie was always a popular girl. Not that being popular counted at her school. There were only twelve kids in her grade but Hydie prided her self on being the most popular.

She went to the bigger towns to be taught cheer and dance. She excelled at both. She competed each year, always taking away the gold. ( Or platinum, whatever the highest award was that day.)

Yet Hydie still was unhappy with her life. Unhappy and scared. She dreaded coming home to her father. He was the worst. He hit her and beat her to relieve his stress from work. At first they were just small hits on the arm when he got angry but it didn't take long to grow into bruises that lasted for weeks.

This confused Hydie. She didn't know what she was doing to deserve these beatings. She starting cutting herself to know she could still feel and shoving her finger down her throat to please her father that called her a fat pig.

Hydie's mom was never around. She worked constantly as a cleaning lady. When she got home she slept. One night she returned early right in the middle of a beating.

She was horrified. She packed Hydie's and hers bags and boarded the next plane to Central, California where her sister lived. It was Hydie's freshman year of high school a perfect time for change.

Hydie was good at adjusting. She made her way into the most popular peoples group and stopped the puking. Though she became to reliant on the cutting to stop. Its her big secret one she hopes stays hidden.

Sample Rp:

Phebe was ready to go OUT! last night was a bad one for her. a night mare had shook her to the core. The smell of smoke still filled her nostril. the laughing of the man with the cigar still rand in her ears. Phebe had to get her mind some where else.

She grabbed her camera and looked through her photo's. yesterday her muse was high. It was great. Every leaf seemed to have a story to her. Phebe bit at her lip. That was yesterday.

Phebe went to her closet bare feet hitting the ground. She had so much to choose from. wait. She shook her head an idea filling her mind barely pushing away the nightmare. It was summer and she had yet to go swimming.

Phebe smiled at her idea. It was best for her to be alone after a rough nigh like last night was. She needed to clear her mind. People made her think more of her job before now.

Phebe made her way to the drawers that held her swim clothes. she pulled out her Favorited swim suit. A red flowered top and a little more than nothing red bottom. Walking around with only that on was sure to draw attention.

Phebe smiled at the thought. Yet she still dug through her drawers to find a pair of black cut off shorts that cover just enough to be considered decent.

Phebe decided atop was worthless if she was just going to swim. In her bag she threw a towel and a shirt just in case. Around her neck Phebe wore a camera necklace along with her real camera. Then she braided her bright red hair into two pigtails. On her way out the door Phebe fished her outfit with a hat sunglasses and the most unreasonable shoes she could find.

She liked the way she looked. it was different just like her. Phebe headed to the pool ready to dive into the water and get rid of the smokey smell that was clinging to her as though she had smoked a cigar herself. Her stomach swirled remembering that night and that man. Phebe must have ran to the pool. She was there much faster than she thought she would have been.

Phebe placed her hat and glasses and bag on a chair in the far end of the pool. Some one had just jumped into the pool as she walked in. Phebe raised the camera from around her neck... The lighting seemed to be perfect in there. catching the pool just right. she wanted a picture of the lonely towel that was thrown onto a chair across the pool.

Her heals clicked as she came closer to the edge of the pool. Her manual zoom. click she took her picture. Right then the boy, the man resurfaced. she saw him through her camera lens. He was hot.

Phebe dropped the camera letting it hang around her neck. A smile played on her lips. This was the perfect way to get the smoke out of her mind.

She sunk into her right hip, placing one hand on her waist the other played with her braid. She waited to see what this boy would say.

Celeb:

Heather morris

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Age: 16
Experience: 3 Years
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[( shannon )]

Hey there! So I thought the application had a good plot line but it needs a little mending.

1) There were quite a few grammar and spelling errors. Run a spell check first and then go back and reread it for things like a capital letter missing after a period and correct things like this section:
"Her eyes are a greenish blue but she knows how to high light the. With the perfect make up. Hydie's lips are bear shaped and usually sports a sparkly pink gloss." which should be "Her eyes are a greenish blue but she knows how to highlight them with the perfect make up. Hydie's lips are bear shaped and usually sport a sparkly pink gloss." Also, check for repetition of words close in space to one another and use synonyms. Make sure there are no run on sentences as well that might need periods in between. There were also quite a few apostrophes before "s" where they didn't belong and the word was simply plural. Just go back and do some fixing up and it should be fine.

2) I can see that she is rather perfect except for her struggle with the cuts and bruises, however, I do not feel like she belongs in the Royal Court. The lack of drinking and smoking and generally being a goodie two shoes would probably land her in a clique such as the wannabes or perhaps the preps. If you change the personality a tad to make her bitchier she would fit, but I think looking at other clique options might help. The personality would also benefit from being at least a paragraph longer.